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We’d stare at each other from across the room;
My heart would flutter.

When he looked at me my heart fluttered like the wings of
A humming bird.
I don’t know why it fluttered.

When he touched me,
My arms turned into gooseflesh,
Sending a tingling feeling throughout my body.

When he kissed me,
My breath was stolen away,
Gone like the wind.

When he spoke to me, his voice was high.
Maybe he’d be stuck in puberty forever.

No, I knew why my heart fluttered when he looked at me,
Because he was probably thinking of a way to make me cry.

My heart fluttered like a humming bird’s wings
Because I was terrified when he looked at me like that.

My skin turned into gooseflesh when he touched me, because
It sent shivers down my spin when his clammy hands clamped over my shoulders.
That tingling sensation was telling me to run, run away now!

When he stole my breath away,
It’s because his lips crushed mine in a bruising kiss that
Left me breathless with fear.

No, he wasn’t stuck in puberty forever.
His voice was high because he was yelling at me.

I was like the rabbit and he the coyote.
I’d already run, but I wasn’t fast enough.
He’d caught me by the tail, toying with me, tossing me around
Like a dog’s favorite toy.

But pretty soon, his teeth would clamp down, and
I’d no longer have to worry about my fear of heights.
©2008-2009 ~MuteMystery
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:iconumjahwa:
Nice change of tone.

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If I give you my honest opinion,
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thank you?

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:iconumjahwa:
Its a good thing (in my mind at least).
Adds complexity and depth while messing with the reader's head (expects one thing but receives another).

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Give and take, are you awake?
If I give you my honest opinion,
would you be willing to share yours?
:iconmutemystery:
ahhh
ok
then thank you
makes me feel better
that im actually writing something pretty good that ppl actually like =]

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Periods Suck. Comma's Rule! -Smosh

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